01 Oct #FallWritingFrenzy Contest Entry: METAMORPHOSIS

METAMORPHOSIS
By
Shelly Mack
The hunter waited.
The scent of his prey wafted toward where he crouched in the shadows. His nostrils tingled and only well practiced control kept him rooted.
A combination of the bright church and autumn leaves made her vermillion hair shimmer with gentle perfection as it bounced over her school backpack.
He licked his lips, then let his tongue travel over his needle-sharp incisors.
In his three hundred years, he had never witnessed such beauty. Six months in the making and now was the time.
Avoiding the natural light, he crept in the murk to fall in behind her as she entered the woods, then watched in curiosity as she bent down. He zoomed in on her slim porcelain fingers. In her palm was a butterfly. Her cheeks pinked in the breeze of the night air, and the expression of joy on her face stalled him.
‘Fly free,’ she said.
He stood immobilised, as if chained under water. Her eyes—the love, the contentment.
Something stirred within. Something new.
She left and he stared as her frame diminished before him. Her lyrical voice continued to sing in his ears as he strode through the graveyard to his crypt. Tomorrow.
Kirsty McQueen
Posted at 20:52h, 01 OctoberNever fail to impress Shelly, outstanding.
admin
Posted at 08:55h, 03 OctoberThanks Kirsty. x
Katie
Posted at 23:24h, 01 OctoberLove that moment of pause! Good luck in the contest.
admin
Posted at 08:55h, 03 OctoberThank you so much.
Cindy Mackenzie
Posted at 06:34h, 02 OctoberVery intriguing.
admin
Posted at 08:54h, 03 OctoberThank you.
Frazer Nangle
Posted at 06:36h, 02 OctoberSounds like she had some impact on him. Would love to know what happens next….
admin
Posted at 08:54h, 03 OctoberA new idea novel I think!
Joanne Minto
Posted at 16:48h, 02 OctoberI am left feeling thirsty for more with this one! Good luck my Shelly xx
admin
Posted at 08:54h, 03 OctoberThank you Jo x
Elizabeth James
Posted at 17:28h, 02 OctoberOh, so creepy….and so good!! 🙌🙌
admin
Posted at 08:54h, 03 OctoberThank you so much. That made my day.
Leeanne adlam
Posted at 08:51h, 03 OctoberThis is outstanding you are so creative and can’t wait to read ur novel loved this story
admin
Posted at 08:53h, 03 OctoberThank you so much. I will keep you posted.
Sam S
Posted at 15:56h, 03 OctoberHow mysterious an intriguing Bella moment perhaps 🤔 I’d love to know what’s beyond those trees … more please 😁
admin
Posted at 18:43h, 03 OctoberAh, maybe you will my friend. Thank you!
Joanne R
Posted at 22:34h, 03 OctoberI have always been a fan of Vampire films and books so really enjoyed reading this and it definitely left me wanting more. The perfect Autumn / Halloween read. Thank you for sharing with us.
admin
Posted at 07:22h, 04 OctoberThank you so much Joanne.
Sarina Siebenaler
Posted at 17:54h, 05 OctoberThis is amazing! Great work and so creative! Your descriptive writing is powerful!
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Posted at 19:15h, 05 OctoberThank you so much Sarina.
Donna Maksimovic
Posted at 11:49h, 06 OctoberBeautifully written you have such a gift for writing ✍️ never let that slip away. Good luck 🤞
admin
Posted at 14:23h, 06 OctoberThanks Donna, that is so kind.
Melisa Wrex
Posted at 19:27h, 07 OctoberLucky girl… today. Tomorrow, maybe not. Good stuff! –Melisa Wrex @mowrex (Twitter)
admin
Posted at 14:40h, 18 OctoberThank you Melissa.
Gilmour Amanda
Posted at 17:27h, 21 OctoberI need to know more! Make this a novel please xxx
admin
Posted at 13:31h, 27 OctoberOn my list Amanda x